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Eddo36

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Just need thoughts. Will go on back cover. Aye or Nay? -

 

The horrific wrath of an ancient curse is unleashed upon an unsuspecting city. As darkness begins to swarm over the living, a police officer desperately fights back against the nightmare. Wounded and hunted down, Officer Brian Reaper faces his darkest night. But as the heart of the evil looms closer, nothing is as it seems.

 

btw for anyone wondering, the story is 18+ so I'm not going to post a link to it here. if you want to read, just send me a PM.

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Undecided, cause theres not much info there. One presumes that it woudl work in concert with the rest of the cover and the title, though, so might be fine.

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Cliche and filled with vague adjectives. It'd be better if it actually gave some idea of the contents. I'm guessing its zombies, so you may as well let the reader know right off the bat that it's going to be zombies, and people shooting zombies. Zombies are an easy thing to sell to zombie fans so you'll definitely want to make it obvious.

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Nah it's just 18+ because of some F-bombs and one particular scene.

 

And I was trying to make it not sound cliche, though I had intentionally left it vague because I just thought specification would give the story away.

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It's so vague it could go on the back of almost any book about evil. I donno, Sometime generics work but I think you need to give more info about the crisis, not necessarily what's causing it but more like what the response (for example assuming the city gets placed under quarantine mention that "the police officer searches a city under quarantine for the cause of the nightmare")

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Kevin Butler will awesome your face off.

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'Wounded and hunted down' suggests past perfect, How can he do anything if he has already been hunted down. 'hunted' is better. Also starting a clause with a capitalized 'But'.

 

How is this.

 

Officer Brian Reaper faces his darkest night, wounded and hunted, but as the heart of the evil looms closer, nothing is as it seems.

Na na  na na  na na  ...

greg358 from Darksouls 3 PVP is a CHEATER.

That is all.

 

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How about: Officer Brian "Grim Reaper" Reaper was just one day from retirement. Then zombies attacked. Now the only thing between Reaper and his condo in Miami is an endless army of God Damned Zombies. And the only thing between Reaper and the zombies is a pair of a Berettas and every God Damn Bullet he's got. There's also a hot female sidekick and a God Damned Dog.

 

However, I'd keep the last sentence. "But nothing is as it seems." That really ratchets up the tension.

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Thanks, but it's more than just a zombie novel. The zombie part ends when the prologue ends. By the way, my artist gave me a pre-sketch. It's not the final, but the goggles are going to be changed so it doesn't look like Splinter Cell.

 

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It is hard to give some judgement, based on the info you gave us, but good luck nevertheless.

"Some men see things as they are and say why?"
"I dream things that never were and say why not?"
- George Bernard Shaw

"Hope in reality is the worst of all evils because it prolongs the torments of man."
- Friedrich Nietzsche

 

"The amount of energy necessary to refute bull**** is an order of magnitude bigger than to produce it."

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Since the fanfic itself seems to be complete rubbish, its only fair that your desciption reflects that fact. So its good that its very bad.

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Important: as the following sentence contains many naughty words I warn you not to read it under any circumstances; botty, knickers, wee, erogenous zone, psychiatrist, clitoris, stockings, bosom, poetry reading, dentist, fellatio and the department of agriculture.

 

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Why are we all being mean to this guy? I can't remember.

There will always be a couple of trolls who think it easier to ridicule than to be constructive. Maybe they lack imagination themselves?

 

Can you really start a sentece with "But..." in English?

“He who joyfully marches to music in rank and file has already earned my contempt. He has been given a large brain by mistake, since for him the spinal cord would surely suffice.” - Albert Einstein

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Why do I get the feeling this book will have more bottom descriptions than zombies?

"It wasn't lies. It was just... bull****"."

             -Elwood Blues

 

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