Sibling debate, need others opinion on my stories.

[Sun]

My sibling thinks that my stories are out of this world, in a bad way. Apparently the main thing they all have in common is lack of reader relation to the main character. We've decided to let this forum and another judge the ideas. Here's one that I will share, but it's only the summary so you won't get AAALLL the "wackiness".

 

The son of a missing god, endowed with a few powers limited only to female gods, seeks the destruction of alien conquerors(?) to restore order and regain ownership of his elemental realm.

 

Constructed critizism(?), please...

[Cantousent]

Endeavor, always, to live beyond the limits of your brother's expectations.

 

The story has some tried and true elements, and I suspect that a good writer could take those elements into a successful story.

 

There's no real way to assess your story from what you've written in your first post. On the other hand, my advice is: try. The attempt will almost surely be as valuable as success. Try, and if your story is never published, you will yet enjoy the fruits of your labor. If your story is published, those fruits will be all the sweeter.

[Volourn]

Meh. Like Eldar stated, it be silly to try to judge the entire story based on the line. It has the potential to be crappy, and it has the potential to be good. I think the key here is how your main character comes across. Even in a fantasy setting, the protagainist has to be believeable, and true. The reader has to want him to win, and for that to happen it has to be made to look possible for the protaganist to lose.

[metadigital]

Very true. It doesn't matter how fantastical the scenario, as long as the audience can identify with the protagonist on some way, share some emotional capital and feel like they have "walked in his/her/insert-the-possessive-pronoun-of-whatever-fantastical-gender shoes".

 

So the plot was fine. (Where did the god go? How can gods just go missing? Isn't that against some divine truancy law, or something?) And this trans-gender-power-wielding demi-god seemingly has emotions that are recognisable by an empathic audience ...

 

... then again I think asking us lot is like getting a sanity check from an electorate of inmates of bedlam ...

[Nartwak]

Try less messianic themes.

 

Which is an irrelevant comment for me to make because, as they say, it's really all in the execution.

[metadigital]

Now that I've thought (a bit more -- :D ) about it, it does sound very similar to the Babylonian Gilgamesh myth (y'know, the first ever written story?); apart from the female powers, but that was never overtly stated in the fable so perhaps it was some post-production editing; all you need is a bestest buddy Enkidu type character ...

[Child of Flame]

Now that I've thought (a bit more --  :D ) about it, it does sound very similar to the Babylonian Gilgamesh myth (y'know, the first ever written story?); apart from the female powers, but that was never overtly stated in the fable so perhaps it was some post-production editing; all you need is a bestest buddy Enkidu type character ...

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That was The Epic of Gilgamesh, get your names right, and what was it written in or you don't pass the test!

[metadigital]

Ancient Babylonian cunieform script.

 

(Go to Church!)

[Sun]

I guess the "problem" is that I'm an action guy, and yes I didn't share how that universe works. I explained it all to my friend, he asked if it was a series and from another's point of view I now realize that this is a very large, complicated (already knew this part) story. I'm paranoid, so I won't be sharing the rest of the details of this story. I could share another summary, but it's most likely to be as vague as the first one. Want to hear?

[metadigital]

Knock yourself out!