Ok, I've read it through again...
I think the main part of the chapter that wasn't particularly well done was the whole "mnemochive" or whatever you call it bit, as it didn't seem to fit in with the rest of the chapter... seemed almost tangent-like...
Another aspect that put me off was how you wrote Vikor... the last time you had written about him he came across as if he didn't take the whole 'being responsible' part that seriously (like how he spoke so casually when reporting for duty), so when he said that he'd go down with his ship it didn't quite fit in with the way he was initially portrayed (I suppose that the case with that may be that there could be more to him than what there initially seemed)...
Anyway, I hope my rambling makes sense, if not then I'm sorry Arch, but I am still suffering from my insomnia
DL