Awz Posted June 1, 2005 Share Posted June 1, 2005 I've started working on a story and felt like getting some outside oppinions. My friends haven't been too insightful.. One thing, these parts are incomplete. I skip ahead if I get stuck on a part; can't think of anything to add at the moment. So any comments, suggestions, or bashing on my writing is welcome. *note* the "quote" the girl says is ridiculous I know, I'm not very good at coming up with those kind of things. Chapter 1 The waning sun had begun to withdraw from the day. A warm summer wind whipped across the country. Shadows danced out from the fleeting light and darkened the land. In the twilight walked a darker shade. It Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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