Lord Satasn Posted March 29, 2005 Share Posted March 29, 2005 This is my short story I wrote...it's more of a rough draft-summary of an Idea of a story I never got to writing...so it's not really in Novel Context....if that makes sense..... Here is the First Part....and then I'll post the Alternate ending...which I like better.... It is long, bewarned....and there will be some continuity mistakes with the "star wars" universe only because EU is NOT cannon so I do what I want with it....;-) LET ME KNOW WHAT U GUYS THINK!!!!!!! Serifir Satasn: Fall of the Jedi Knight By Michael Oliva Serifir Satasn was born on the planet Bestavion, an uncharted world (at that time) near the outer rim, around 5,500 years ago. Being an orphan and never knowing his true family, Serifir was passed along from family to family until the age of 13 (legal age of an adult on that planet). He was in a way, a problem child. He had a severe temper and since childhood he could not properly control his emotions and passions. These things kept him from remaining in one foster home for more than a few years in each. This left him with an empty feeling inside and was a source for a lot of anger. At the age of 13 he set off to leave Bestavion once and for all, never to return. The people on that planet were cold and heartless to him and he needed to get away. So he traveled to the planet Tatooine, for it was a desert planet and hardly populated. He wanted an adventurous life style and living in the desert hunting game to survive seemed to be the way to go. Unfortunately his decision was unwise and there was not much at all to live off of in those deserts. However, this experience helped shape his character and make him stronger and aware of his surroundings. He learned the mentality of the survival of the fittest on Tatooine and kept it for the rest of his life. It was on Tatooine that a Jedi Master named Kirith Van Kaltur found Serifir. Kirith had saved him from a desert creature that had ambushed Serifir while on a hunt. Kirith was most impressed by the skills that Serfir wielded and he decided to train him into the Jedi Order. At this time the Jedi Council was desperately in need of help and low in numbers due to the wrath of the Sith Lord Sildurian. Once a great Jedi-like most of them-Michael Sildurian was a Jedi knight, fallen to the dark side and devoted to taking as many Jedi with him as he could. Sildurian had many followers, and sith Spies in the Jedi council itself. Jedi Knight Sirith Van Kaltur was the brother of Kirith Van Kaltur and secretly a spy for the sith. He too saw the potential in Serifir Satasn that his brother saw, however Sirith had a much more malicious goal in mind. He poisoned the mind of Serifir and taught him the ways of the Sith. Serifir-with years of anger inside him-knew that he could not hold to the Jedi teachings because he was too weak. He was meant for the dark side. Once he was ready Serifir was told to Strike down his master, Kirith. This order was given to him by Kiriths brother Sirith. By doing this Sirith would become the Jedi Master and have a reason to take revenge on the sith. This would give him public approval and it was the perfect plan. Serifir challenged his former master, revealing his new path, and struck him down easily. Through his training Serifir had become more powerful than his master so quickly that Kirith did not expect. Kirith saw that Serifir had even more greater powers than he ever imagined but they were not controlled by sense, rather than passion. On that day Serifir struck down his master, but it was the path that would lead to many other things Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Satasn Posted March 29, 2005 Author Share Posted March 29, 2005 and Here is the Alternate Ending, with a more sinister twist, and more description....muahahaa ..... Serifir Satasn had killed Sith Lord Sildurion with the aide of the traitorous brother of his Former Master Sirith Van-Kaltur. Kaltur offered Satasn the spot of Sith Apprentice, because as an older force user, Sirith Van-Kaltur felt he deserved the spot of Lord of the Sith Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Satasn Posted March 30, 2005 Author Share Posted March 30, 2005 Anything? Any feedback? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Laozi Posted March 30, 2005 Share Posted March 30, 2005 Ya good names are alway really hard to make up People laugh when I say that I think a jellyfish is one of the most beautiful things in the world. What they don't understand is, I mean a jellyfish with long, blond hair. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Satasn Posted March 30, 2005 Author Share Posted March 30, 2005 lol true, so are u saying mine are good or bad? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Satasn Posted March 30, 2005 Author Share Posted March 30, 2005 54 views but only 1 response.....cmon....lol it's not like I'm askin a question nobody knows the answer to....all u have to do is give ur opinion of my story...I don't care if you love it or hate it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth Flatus Posted March 30, 2005 Share Posted March 30, 2005 My guess is that no is answering cos its too long - sorry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kor Qel Droma Posted March 30, 2005 Share Posted March 30, 2005 there were too many 'f's in that...otherwise, it was well, a fanfic. Jaguars4ever is still alive. No word of a lie. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Satasn Posted March 31, 2005 Author Share Posted March 31, 2005 f's? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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